The picture you included in your introduction does an incredibly good job of drawing the reader into the start of your storybook. Plus, its intensity matches the tone of the narrator in the introduction. In that regard, you did a good job instilling his speech with that of a announcer. Also, did you mean to rhyme at the end of the first paragraph? "The Circus of Beasts here in Athens, Greece!" Well, it's not rhyme in the true sense, but it is at least assonance. Still, it's great! The coverpage works well, too. If you want any suggestions, you might see what else you can do with the title "Circus of Beasts." The title itself is fine, but is there anyway you can make it bigger or change the font a bit? Still, that's a really small aspect of the whole thing.
I like the idea that you plan to include "guest speakers" into your setting of a circus. That will give you plenty of opportunities to test the waters when it comes to speaking in another's voice. Not to mention, getting multiple perspectives allows you to bring the aspect of credibility to the front. After all, you did mention that Zeus came to set the story straight.
Linzee, I decided to comment on your storybook for week 7. I chose yours because the title sounded really interesting. A storybook full of origin stories of fantastic creatures sounds like a lot of fun. However, I was first drawn to the spelling of your first name. I have never seen it spelled that way before. Very cool. I like the picture you have on the welcome page. It immediately tells the readers that they will be reading stories of some fearsome and dangerous beasts. The layout of your site is well put together and easy to navigate. I like the theme you’ve set up for your storybook in the introduction. I think a circus that invites the whole town to come and hear stories from the creatures themselves is a fantastic idea. Assuming, of course, that this circus is nothing like the circuses in America that practically torture animals to teach them how to do those tricks. That’s just awful. I also like that the creatures are from Greek mythology. There are so many great stories from Greece! There is one thing that I noticed that may need correction. In the first paragraph you mention that you’ll start with a story of a unicorn, but in the second you say that we will end with that story. It’s just a small contradiction. Other than that, I believe your storybook is fantastic.
Linzee, This is a really cool idea. I like the idea of hearing all of these creatures' stories and their histories as told by them. I also like that you're going to have others weigh in on the truthfulness of their stories - that is really cool idea. Your home page is very nice. I really like the image you used. It is very interesting and made me want to read the introduction to see what it was about. I also like that you kept the theme clean and simple and didn't go overboard with colors and fonts.
The image of the Phoenix you used for the introduction is awesome! I like that it is in flames since they rise from the ashes. Your introduction was written very well too; it's very clear and concise. I definitely want to come back and read about the unicorn's dark and mysterious past. And since they never die, they will have plenty of interesting battle stories to tell. I also liked that you explained why Zeus and other special guest will weigh on the truthfulness of their stories; it makes it clear from the beginning so it will be nice to know that for later on.
I think this is a really cool idea and I definitely want to come back and read more!
I just wanted to stop by and thank you for leaving such a great comment on my portfolio post! I appreciate that you gave me some advice on how I could maybe rework the paragraph structure of some of my paragraphs. I am not a very strong writer so I really appreciate any advice I can get! Thank you so much!
When I read the title of your site, the first thought that came to mind was that your stories were in regards of traditional circus animals. To my pleasant surprise your cover page image clearly indicated otherwise! Without reading your introduction, or first story, I can already tell I am going to like your Storybook. I have always been intrigued by dragons and other mythical creatures. I was originally going to create a Storybook about them, but unfortunately I was unable to find enough resources on a topic that I liked. I ended up dropping my project and changing subjects. This being said, this only adds to the excitement I have in reading your stories!
I am especially ecstatic about the mythology you have chosen! All of these creatures are amazing, in my eyes, and I cannot wait until your stories are published! I am writing over Hercules labors, and during my research I began to wonder if I would ever hear of Pegasus. This creature couldn't make it into my storybook, but I am very intrigued to find out what you do with its story. Good job so far!
I could tell from your title that this would be an interesting storybook! I am fascinated by beasts in stories, so I think the collage on your cover page really got my attention! It helps to captivate the audience by displaying different beasts to relate to your storybook. The phoenix you chose for your introduction really had a WOW factor to it. I liked that your introduction reminded me of a circus, which obviously relates to the name, but it was very interesting to read it that way. It brings a comical sense of wonderment into the story and keeps me on my toes to hear each beast's tale. I could just picture a ring with an announcer and then the audience waiting to be amazed. Moving on to your first story, I love the collage for the hydra. Helena did a fantastic job of telling us her history, her feelings, and the details of her life. There were a lot of details of myhtology that I did not know a lot about for the hydra! I definitely got a Hercules vibe as well from your writing though and I am glad you included those details in your storybook despite them not being in the original. That really was my favorite part of the entire story. Good job! I am looking forward to more!
I was really excited to see what your storybook was about when I first read the title. "Circus of Beasts: An Origin Story" is certainly an attention getter! I was curious to see whether the "beasts" in your story would be traditional circus animals such as lions and elephants, or something more mystical. However, the picture on the home page answered my question immediately! I think this collage of different images was a great way to both grab the readers attention and give some idea of what your stories will be about.
The introduction page you crafted is perfect! I like how the large image of the phoenix is at the top of the page; when I opened it it was kind of a "wow" moment, as I did not expect such a large and colorful image. This was a great way to captivate your readers and get them excited for the following story. The story itself set up the rest of your storybook very well. I really liked the line "“Ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls, gather ‘round!" It gave a sort of circusy feel that definitely fits your tale. Your first story was a great start to the storybook. The idea of the hydra's middle head being the only immortal one made me chuckle.
Hello Linzee! I am not in your group this week but I decided to choose your storybook as my one free choice. I have yet to comment on your storybook so I will be commenting on just about everything. To start off, you chose a great theme and picture for your cover page. Your font is easy to read so that is great as well. One thing I did notice is that your first story shows up above your introduction in your site map. I had this same problem last year and our professor Laura Gibbs was great at helping me fix that. I love that you have included a picture in your introduction. Not many of the other students in our class have done this so far. I think this is an amazing picture and a great way to show the reader what a phoenix is if they have never seen one. The Introduction was great and really draws the reader in but I did notice that you state we will from Hydra first twice. Once was in the first paragraph and second in the second paragraph. This seemed a little repetitive to me. “I remember the first time I Herakles.” I think this sentence is missing something. Maybe you are missing met? “When Herakles he tried to remove the robe, his skin ripped off with it and he went through a very painful time before he passed away.” I think you need to remove the “he” after Herakles. You also have the commenting on for your first story. Your first story was great. I did not know that Herakles was spelled that way. Also I liked that there was actually two stories in your one story. Great job!
In your storybook project's introduction, I really enjoyed the contrasting dualities that you presented. The creatures we should be scared of aren't scary, and the ones we would expect to be harmless have dark secrets. I liked that you took what the audience would be expecting and turned it on its head.
In this sentence, "but will surprise you with their surprisingly dark histories and abilities-like the unicorn," I think you meant to use an em dash between abilities and like instead of hyphenating them.
I thought the picture on your introduction page was a bit too big because when I clicked on the page, I couldn't see the text at all until I scrolled down.
Considering that this story is framed as though Helen the Hydra is telling a story to a huge audience, the story is sort of dense. It seems more like a written account than a verbal account to me. Because the whole first paragraph doesn't really have much to do with Helen the Hydra, it bogged down the story. I also think some character introductions would be useful in case some readers are not familiar with the characters of Atlas, Herakles, or Nesseus.
I think it's good that you have so much material that you want to cover. But I think if you trimmed down the amount of information you wanted to present, you could tell it in a more nuanced storytelling manner.
When I first got to your storybook cover page I really thought that it spoke to the reader well! I think that it is so important to choose a color scheme that highlights and enhances your story theme. I think that you did a successful job of doing this and that you really picked elements that flowed nicely together. I think that the picture is good and really does a nice job of introducing us to characters and helps to set up ideas in the reader’s mind of what the following stories may be about. I think it is a great idea to keep things plain and simple in order to not overwhelm the reader, great job! I really like the picture that you picked for your introduction page, I think that it speaks to the reader well, I would however make it a little bit smaller just so the reader can see the whole picture when you first arrive on the page. I do think this is such a great picture though because this really depicts with great detail what a phoenix is so readers who have not seen one before will be able to picture it! Overall I think that you are doing a great job so far, keep up the great work!
Hi Linzee. I picked your storybook as my free choice this week, and since I have not read your storybook before I will be commenting on all of it. First, I think the dark color scheme you used for your storybook is great and goes well with the theme of your storybook about gods and goddesses. Also, the picture you included on your cover page is awesome. I see you created it yourself using a picture collage maker. I use one for my cover page picture. It makes it look so much better rather than having three big pictures together. I think it is so cool you placed your storybook setting in Athens, Greece. I was able to visit there two summers ago and it was so incredibly amazing! I am assuming because you chose to do your storybook over gods and goddesses, that you like Greek Mythology. You would probably enjoy visiting Greece! Anyways, your first story was great also. I like that each page of your storybook we get to learn about someone like Helena the Hydra. And I think it is great that you are using your own creativity to tell the story, and maybe change it up a little bit. Great work so far. Can't wait to read more!
I was so excited when I saw the title of your story. Circus! It almost makes me think of my storybook in a way, except mine is kind of a weird zoo... thing...
So from what I understand this circus is more like a storytelling thing with the beasts? I imagine a dark circus setting where this big ol' hydra named Helena waddles up to the middle of the stage and tells her story to the crowd. I don't know the original stories so I don't really have anything to compare the retelling to, but I can say that I love your creativity and you're good at writing! And I really do appreciate the lesson that you threw in. It's always nice to have a reason for telling a story, I think. :) Also now I want a pretty little bearded dragon named Helena.
Your theme looks nice! The dark background with white text is pretty hard on my eyes (less so than white on black though), but it does aid in the whole atmosphere thing. I love the hydra collage and phoenix picture you chose. I bet there are a lot of fun beast pictures to choose from out there.
I noticed when I went to your site that your little navigation bar on the left is out of order. Or I think it is.... we're supposed to have the intro first, right? You might look into that! But I love your storybook and I'll definitely be checking up on it some time! :D
Linzee! This Storybook is so cool, so far! That story of the Hydra was pretty fantastic and I loved how the Hydra was forced into it to save and protect the family. I thought that added a cool moral dilemma that you don't ever see in Greek mythology since the Greeks didn't really have morals...judging by their stories. Anyway, I thought that was fantastic. I also really liked you using the Greek name for Hercules instead of just calling him Hercules. I don't know why, but it was a nice touch. Probably my favorite part of the entire first story was that you named the crab Marvin. It caught me off guard and it was just the perfect jab of humor that I love. I'm assuming the fact that the Hydra is named Helena is either there for alliteration or as a reference to another poplular Greek story.
Also, I really liked the design of the Storybook. It wasn't too much, but it wasn't bland either. Plus, those images were fantastic. Particularly, the giant image of the phoenix in the Introduction was freaking awesome, but I also really liked the imaging for the Hydra and the collage on the cover page. Again, really great work, and I thought it was such a cool concept to tell stories that focused on monsters and their points of view. I look forward to reading more throughout the semester.
Let me say, the picture as you start the intro is gorgeous! I feel like it makes a pretty big impact as well, since it’s a burst of color on an otherwise black and white background. As for the actual introduction, it got me hooked! Especially when you tell the reader that there are more to the stories of mythical creatures than one would expect. The two I’m most curious about are the stories of the hydra and the unicorn, since I’ve pegged them respectively as evil and good for my entire life.
I didn’t think about the fact that I wouldn’t know, but I’m glad you cleared up which head was the main head and talking. Anyways, I thought this was really interesting! You never really do get to see the circumstances of the beast that Heracles fights, and it’s cool that you’ve provided a backstory that allows the reader to better understand the motivations of the hydra. I suppose what I’m trying to say is that you did a great job of making the hydra a nuanced character, rather than being evil. Overall, I think you did a really good job! I’m looking forward to reading more of your stories!
Hi Linzee! I'm trying to read storybooks that I haven't seen yet before the class ends so here I am! The title of your storybook jumped out to me as interesting so I’m curious to see what you’re theme is. I really like the collage you made on your home page and I’m wondering if you put that together yourself or found it already pieced together? If you did it yourself I’m curious as to how you do that! I like the look of your page a lot as well (I should since we have the same color scheme and all!).
Obviously, the first thing that jumped out at me on your introduction is the giant flaming phoenix. I think it’s a great picture and I like that you want it to stand out, but perhaps the next size smaller would allow the whole thing to be seen without scrolling? Just a thought. Anyways, I thought your introduction was great and you set up the stories very well. You did a good job of introducing the “show” as a circus would be introduced. I’m wondering who the storyteller is but maybe I’ll find that out in the story.
My favorite part of this story is the work you put into combining elements from multiple sources to make this story come together. I’m very familiar with the story overall and I think this was a great retelling, good job!
The coverpage is a little bland, but it’s fine. It gets through the requirements easily - I’m just underwhelmed by the pictures you chose. The introduction was slightly confusing. Um, I’m not sure what kind of venue this is. Is it a television program? Is it a conference? Like, I’m just looking for some context here. Also, that bird pic is REALLY big. Your story left me really confused. I didn’t understand the Atlas tie-in, mainly because though Helena claims to have helped, when I go back over that she does nothing but watch. I think you can completely scrap that part and use the word count to expand on you second part, which is the main bit of the story. Especially the bit about Hades using her family as leverage. You could set up the stage with the interviewer, have him question what happens - especially since I assume most of the audience knows about the fight. You can skim that part with a few sentences but focus mainly on the motivation behind the fight, since that’s really where this differs from myth.
Hi, Linzee! I decided to read your storybook as one of my free reads this week and I'm really glad I did! First of all, I'm a huge fan of alternate versions or perspectives on well known stories, so I liked the concept of your storybook immediately! But I thought it was really cool how you decided to tell stories about the Greco-Roman monsters rather than just seemingly evil characters. I really like how you've humanized the Hydra. These monsters in Greek mythology are always portrayed as just that - monsters - so it was really interesting to hear how the monster itself actually felt as it was being attacked by various heroes. I like that you've added your own background story as to why the Hydra was fighting Hercules in the first place. This strengthened the notion that these mythical creatures are not simply mindless killing machines or pets of the gods who sole purpose is to the bidding of the gods. I also liked seeing that the Hydra also seems to have quite the moral compass as he shuns Atlas after he tricks Hercules. This also adds to the now human-like perspective we have of the Hydra. I love looking at things from a completely different perspective so this was a great read! Great job!
The picture you included in your introduction does an incredibly good job of drawing the reader into the start of your storybook. Plus, its intensity matches the tone of the narrator in the introduction. In that regard, you did a good job instilling his speech with that of a announcer. Also, did you mean to rhyme at the end of the first paragraph? "The Circus of Beasts here in Athens, Greece!" Well, it's not rhyme in the true sense, but it is at least assonance. Still, it's great! The coverpage works well, too. If you want any suggestions, you might see what else you can do with the title "Circus of Beasts." The title itself is fine, but is there anyway you can make it bigger or change the font a bit? Still, that's a really small aspect of the whole thing.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea that you plan to include "guest speakers" into your setting of a circus. That will give you plenty of opportunities to test the waters when it comes to speaking in another's voice. Not to mention, getting multiple perspectives allows you to bring the aspect of credibility to the front. After all, you did mention that Zeus came to set the story straight.
Linzee,
ReplyDeleteI decided to comment on your storybook for week 7. I chose yours because the title sounded really interesting. A storybook full of origin stories of fantastic creatures sounds like a lot of fun. However, I was first drawn to the spelling of your first name. I have never seen it spelled that way before. Very cool.
I like the picture you have on the welcome page. It immediately tells the readers that they will be reading stories of some fearsome and dangerous beasts. The layout of your site is well put together and easy to navigate.
I like the theme you’ve set up for your storybook in the introduction. I think a circus that invites the whole town to come and hear stories from the creatures themselves is a fantastic idea. Assuming, of course, that this circus is nothing like the circuses in America that practically torture animals to teach them how to do those tricks. That’s just awful.
I also like that the creatures are from Greek mythology. There are so many great stories from Greece! There is one thing that I noticed that may need correction. In the first paragraph you mention that you’ll start with a story of a unicorn, but in the second you say that we will end with that story. It’s just a small contradiction.
Other than that, I believe your storybook is fantastic.
Linzee,
ReplyDeleteThis is a really cool idea. I like the idea of hearing all of these creatures' stories and their histories as told by them. I also like that you're going to have others weigh in on the truthfulness of their stories - that is really cool idea.
Your home page is very nice. I really like the image you used. It is very interesting and made me want to read the introduction to see what it was about. I also like that you kept the theme clean and simple and didn't go overboard with colors and fonts.
The image of the Phoenix you used for the introduction is awesome! I like that it is in flames since they rise from the ashes. Your introduction was written very well too; it's very clear and concise. I definitely want to come back and read about the unicorn's dark and mysterious past. And since they never die, they will have plenty of interesting battle stories to tell. I also liked that you explained why Zeus and other special guest will weigh on the truthfulness of their stories; it makes it clear from the beginning so it will be nice to know that for later on.
I think this is a really cool idea and I definitely want to come back and read more!
I just wanted to stop by and thank you for leaving such a great comment on my portfolio post! I appreciate that you gave me some advice on how I could maybe rework the paragraph structure of some of my paragraphs. I am not a very strong writer so I really appreciate any advice I can get! Thank you so much!
ReplyDeleteLinzee,
ReplyDeleteWhen I read the title of your site, the first thought that came to mind was that your stories were in regards of traditional circus animals. To my pleasant surprise your cover page image clearly indicated otherwise! Without reading your introduction, or first story, I can already tell I am going to like your Storybook. I have always been intrigued by dragons and other mythical creatures. I was originally going to create a Storybook about them, but unfortunately I was unable to find enough resources on a topic that I liked. I ended up dropping my project and changing subjects. This being said, this only adds to the excitement I have in reading your stories!
I am especially ecstatic about the mythology you have chosen! All of these creatures are amazing, in my eyes, and I cannot wait until your stories are published! I am writing over Hercules labors, and during my research I began to wonder if I would ever hear of Pegasus. This creature couldn't make it into my storybook, but I am very intrigued to find out what you do with its story. Good job so far!
I could tell from your title that this would be an interesting storybook! I am fascinated by beasts in stories, so I think the collage on your cover page really got my attention! It helps to captivate the audience by displaying different beasts to relate to your storybook. The phoenix you chose for your introduction really had a WOW factor to it. I liked that your introduction reminded me of a circus, which obviously relates to the name, but it was very interesting to read it that way. It brings a comical sense of wonderment into the story and keeps me on my toes to hear each beast's tale. I could just picture a ring with an announcer and then the audience waiting to be amazed. Moving on to your first story, I love the collage for the hydra. Helena did a fantastic job of telling us her history, her feelings, and the details of her life. There were a lot of details of myhtology that I did not know a lot about for the hydra! I definitely got a Hercules vibe as well from your writing though and I am glad you included those details in your storybook despite them not being in the original. That really was my favorite part of the entire story. Good job! I am looking forward to more!
ReplyDeleteHey Linzee!
ReplyDeleteI was really excited to see what your storybook was about when I first read the title. "Circus of Beasts: An Origin Story" is certainly an attention getter! I was curious to see whether the "beasts" in your story would be traditional circus animals such as lions and elephants, or something more mystical. However, the picture on the home page answered my question immediately! I think this collage of different images was a great way to both grab the readers attention and give some idea of what your stories will be about.
The introduction page you crafted is perfect! I like how the large image of the phoenix is at the top of the page; when I opened it it was kind of a "wow" moment, as I did not expect such a large and colorful image. This was a great way to captivate your readers and get them excited for the following story. The story itself set up the rest of your storybook very well. I really liked the line "“Ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls, gather ‘round!" It gave a sort of circusy feel that definitely fits your tale. Your first story was a great start to the storybook. The idea of the hydra's middle head being the only immortal one made me chuckle.
Hello Linzee! I am not in your group this week but I decided to choose your storybook as my one free choice. I have yet to comment on your storybook so I will be commenting on just about everything. To start off, you chose a great theme and picture for your cover page. Your font is easy to read so that is great as well. One thing I did notice is that your first story shows up above your introduction in your site map. I had this same problem last year and our professor Laura Gibbs was great at helping me fix that. I love that you have included a picture in your introduction. Not many of the other students in our class have done this so far. I think this is an amazing picture and a great way to show the reader what a phoenix is if they have never seen one. The Introduction was great and really draws the reader in but I did notice that you state we will from Hydra first twice. Once was in the first paragraph and second in the second paragraph. This seemed a little repetitive to me. “I remember the first time I Herakles.” I think this sentence is missing something. Maybe you are missing met? “When Herakles he tried to remove the robe, his skin ripped off with it and he went through a very painful time before he passed away.” I think you need to remove the “he” after Herakles. You also have the commenting on for your first story. Your first story was great. I did not know that Herakles was spelled that way. Also I liked that there was actually two stories in your one story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Linzee,
ReplyDeleteIn your storybook project's introduction, I really enjoyed the contrasting dualities that you presented. The creatures we should be scared of aren't scary, and the ones we would expect to be harmless have dark secrets. I liked that you took what the audience would be expecting and turned it on its head.
In this sentence, "but will surprise you with their surprisingly dark histories and abilities-like the unicorn," I think you meant to use an em dash between abilities and like instead of hyphenating them.
I thought the picture on your introduction page was a bit too big because when I clicked on the page, I couldn't see the text at all until I scrolled down.
Considering that this story is framed as though Helen the Hydra is telling a story to a huge audience, the story is sort of dense. It seems more like a written account than a verbal account to me. Because the whole first paragraph doesn't really have much to do with Helen the Hydra, it bogged down the story. I also think some character introductions would be useful in case some readers are not familiar with the characters of Atlas, Herakles, or Nesseus.
I think it's good that you have so much material that you want to cover. But I think if you trimmed down the amount of information you wanted to present, you could tell it in a more nuanced storytelling manner.
When I first got to your storybook cover page I really thought that it spoke to the reader well! I think that it is so important to choose a color scheme that highlights and enhances your story theme. I think that you did a successful job of doing this and that you really picked elements that flowed nicely together. I think that the picture is good and really does a nice job of introducing us to characters and helps to set up ideas in the reader’s mind of what the following stories may be about. I think it is a great idea to keep things plain and simple in order to not overwhelm the reader, great job! I really like the picture that you picked for your introduction page, I think that it speaks to the reader well, I would however make it a little bit smaller just so the reader can see the whole picture when you first arrive on the page. I do think this is such a great picture though because this really depicts with great detail what a phoenix is so readers who have not seen one before will be able to picture it! Overall I think that you are doing a great job so far, keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHi Linzee. I picked your storybook as my free choice this week, and since I have not read your storybook before I will be commenting on all of it. First, I think the dark color scheme you used for your storybook is great and goes well with the theme of your storybook about gods and goddesses. Also, the picture you included on your cover page is awesome. I see you created it yourself using a picture collage maker. I use one for my cover page picture. It makes it look so much better rather than having three big pictures together. I think it is so cool you placed your storybook setting in Athens, Greece. I was able to visit there two summers ago and it was so incredibly amazing! I am assuming because you chose to do your storybook over gods and goddesses, that you like Greek Mythology. You would probably enjoy visiting Greece! Anyways, your first story was great also. I like that each page of your storybook we get to learn about someone like Helena the Hydra. And I think it is great that you are using your own creativity to tell the story, and maybe change it up a little bit. Great work so far. Can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteHi, Linzee!
ReplyDeleteI was so excited when I saw the title of your story. Circus! It almost makes me think of my storybook in a way, except mine is kind of a weird zoo... thing...
So from what I understand this circus is more like a storytelling thing with the beasts? I imagine a dark circus setting where this big ol' hydra named Helena waddles up to the middle of the stage and tells her story to the crowd. I don't know the original stories so I don't really have anything to compare the retelling to, but I can say that I love your creativity and you're good at writing! And I really do appreciate the lesson that you threw in. It's always nice to have a reason for telling a story, I think. :) Also now I want a pretty little bearded dragon named Helena.
Your theme looks nice! The dark background with white text is pretty hard on my eyes (less so than white on black though), but it does aid in the whole atmosphere thing. I love the hydra collage and phoenix picture you chose. I bet there are a lot of fun beast pictures to choose from out there.
I noticed when I went to your site that your little navigation bar on the left is out of order. Or I think it is.... we're supposed to have the intro first, right? You might look into that! But I love your storybook and I'll definitely be checking up on it some time! :D
Linzee! This Storybook is so cool, so far! That story of the Hydra was pretty fantastic and I loved how the Hydra was forced into it to save and protect the family. I thought that added a cool moral dilemma that you don't ever see in Greek mythology since the Greeks didn't really have morals...judging by their stories. Anyway, I thought that was fantastic. I also really liked you using the Greek name for Hercules instead of just calling him Hercules. I don't know why, but it was a nice touch. Probably my favorite part of the entire first story was that you named the crab Marvin. It caught me off guard and it was just the perfect jab of humor that I love. I'm assuming the fact that the Hydra is named Helena is either there for alliteration or as a reference to another poplular Greek story.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I really liked the design of the Storybook. It wasn't too much, but it wasn't bland either. Plus, those images were fantastic. Particularly, the giant image of the phoenix in the Introduction was freaking awesome, but I also really liked the imaging for the Hydra and the collage on the cover page. Again, really great work, and I thought it was such a cool concept to tell stories that focused on monsters and their points of view. I look forward to reading more throughout the semester.
Let me say, the picture as you start the intro is gorgeous! I feel like it makes a pretty big impact as well, since it’s a burst of color on an otherwise black and white background. As for the actual introduction, it got me hooked! Especially when you tell the reader that there are more to the stories of mythical creatures than one would expect. The two I’m most curious about are the stories of the hydra and the unicorn, since I’ve pegged them respectively as evil and good for my entire life.
ReplyDeleteI didn’t think about the fact that I wouldn’t know, but I’m glad you cleared up which head was the main head and talking. Anyways, I thought this was really interesting! You never really do get to see the circumstances of the beast that Heracles fights, and it’s cool that you’ve provided a backstory that allows the reader to better understand the motivations of the hydra. I suppose what I’m trying to say is that you did a great job of making the hydra a nuanced character, rather than being evil. Overall, I think you did a really good job! I’m looking forward to reading more of your stories!
Hi Linzee! I'm trying to read storybooks that I haven't seen yet before the class ends so here I am! The title of your storybook jumped out to me as interesting so I’m curious to see what you’re theme is. I really like the collage you made on your home page and I’m wondering if you put that together yourself or found it already pieced together? If you did it yourself I’m curious as to how you do that! I like the look of your page a lot as well (I should since we have the same color scheme and all!).
ReplyDeleteObviously, the first thing that jumped out at me on your introduction is the giant flaming phoenix. I think it’s a great picture and I like that you want it to stand out, but perhaps the next size smaller would allow the whole thing to be seen without scrolling? Just a thought. Anyways, I thought your introduction was great and you set up the stories very well. You did a good job of introducing the “show” as a circus would be introduced. I’m wondering who the storyteller is but maybe I’ll find that out in the story.
My favorite part of this story is the work you put into combining elements from multiple sources to make this story come together. I’m very familiar with the story overall and I think this was a great retelling, good job!
The coverpage is a little bland, but it’s fine. It gets through the requirements easily - I’m just underwhelmed by the pictures you chose. The introduction was slightly confusing. Um, I’m not sure what kind of venue this is. Is it a television program? Is it a conference? Like, I’m just looking for some context here. Also, that bird pic is REALLY big.
ReplyDeleteYour story left me really confused. I didn’t understand the Atlas tie-in, mainly because though Helena claims to have helped, when I go back over that she does nothing but watch. I think you can completely scrap that part and use the word count to expand on you second part, which is the main bit of the story. Especially the bit about Hades using her family as leverage. You could set up the stage with the interviewer, have him question what happens - especially since I assume most of the audience knows about the fight. You can skim that part with a few sentences but focus mainly on the motivation behind the fight, since that’s really where this differs from myth.
Hi, Linzee! I decided to read your storybook as one of my free reads this week and I'm really glad I did! First of all, I'm a huge fan of alternate versions or perspectives on well known stories, so I liked the concept of your storybook immediately! But I thought it was really cool how you decided to tell stories about the Greco-Roman monsters rather than just seemingly evil characters. I really like how you've humanized the Hydra. These monsters in Greek mythology are always portrayed as just that - monsters - so it was really interesting to hear how the monster itself actually felt as it was being attacked by various heroes. I like that you've added your own background story as to why the Hydra was fighting Hercules in the first place. This strengthened the notion that these mythical creatures are not simply mindless killing machines or pets of the gods who sole purpose is to the bidding of the gods. I also liked seeing that the Hydra also seems to have quite the moral compass as he shuns Atlas after he tricks Hercules. This also adds to the now human-like perspective we have of the Hydra. I love looking at things from a completely different perspective so this was a great read! Great job!
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